Amorphous as the clouds
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Inspired by a Chris A graphic
Amorphous as the clouds above do seem,
their misty spirits rising bid us dream.
My love appears but when I reach for him
the glow that once was there begins to dim.
And as he disappears before my eyes
the wispy cirrus wraps him in disguise
and disappearing, circles round the moon
then carries him away, where cries the loon.
And as the day fades slowly into night
I'm left to long for what once brought delight.
As deafening silence sifts through lonely space
again I see his form, his darling face.
If only he would come and ease the pain
from weakened promises that cause disdain.
But no, I'm left in searing, boundless shock
of icy dark, which creeps inside to mock.
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The poem refers to lost loves and how the memories of them creep into our dreams (day or night), sometimes taking shape, sometimes remaining merely impressions, fliting and fleeting like the clouds. And with the visions may come an old unconscious desire to have that love soothe away the pain or uncertainty present in our lives
Amorphous: lacking definite form; having no specific shape; formless. Also: of no particular kind or character; indeterminate; having no pattern or structure.
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wow...really good...like this one a lot.
Thanks, Austin TX. Glad you liked the poem.
First thing I read on HubPages today. This is so absolutely lovely! I KNOW these feelings. I can't even choose a favorite line they are all so beautiful, so full, flowing one into the next, such feelings and images. I feel like I feel the despaire. It is the absolute perfect match for Cris's graphic. I do love your writing. I do I do I do. Jeez I'm so lucky. I feel silly saying this, but what is actually going through my mind right now is, "Look what I get to read! How lucky am I?!" Clap Clap Clap!
I picked the same graphics from Cris as did Ripplemaker, and its so awesome to see how it has stirred up the creative side in all of us! This poem is beautiful, blends in well with the movement of the graphics.
Thumbs up!
Frieda: Thank you for such glowing comments. They really quell the small voice inside that isn't sure yet that she can do this well. I respect your opinion, as I have read so much of your poetry and know what a wonderful craftsman you are. You've made me very happy.
Alekhouse, you are good and don't you dare doubt yourself!
Thanks, Cindy, another hubber-writer I have a lot of respect for. I really appreciate the comment. But writing is such a personal thing. You have to lay yourself out there on the line and it aint always easy.
Nope, not always easy, and sometimes criticism is hard to take when what you've written is so personal.
VioletSun: Yes, I have been enjoying the excitement and creativity Cris A has stirred up. He truly is a wonderful catalyst. Thank you for your kind comments. I must hurry over to your site now and take a look at your contribution. I'm dying to see it. I know it'll be good.
Cindy,
How well I know. And I'm a person who does not take criticism well. But I'm learning...still growing.
Amorphous...I like the sound of that!
I envy those who can rhyme because I can't! LOL Everytime I try, the poem ends up soundlng unnatural, coerced, forced. Oh well, at least I can derive pleasure from others who could and do it well! Thanks for sharing this wonderful read :D
I'm glad you enjoyed it Cris. Funny about the rhyming thing. I envy people who can write prose poetry. I can't seem to get it right. And it never feels natural to to me. I have to work and work to create a cadence without rhyming. Thanks for the comment. I may pick out another of your images and try for prose this time, for the challenge of it.
The imagery was vivid and clear.Bravo! You have given a new meaning to poetry and the natural atmosphere. hats off to Chris A too for the inspirational art work.
This is so beautiful. Thank you! I lost my love many years ago and even today I can relate.
aoiffe: So glad you stopped by. Was wondering if I was going to hear from you again. Thanks so much for the nice comments.
Mirelli: Happy that you like the poem. I guess this kind of emotional experience hits home with most of us from time to time. So glad you stopped by. Thanks.
Beautifully done AH, there are moments that are wonderful to ponder. :)
Thanks for the kind words. Glad you enjoyed the poem.
I could vividly feel the emotions and power in this darlin'. Good job.
Thanks, Charlie, glad you liked it.
\Brenda Scully 2 years ago
very very good I am so impressed really wonderful...